高考英语“概要写作”也能写出创意?看凌哥如何作答2019年浙江高考英语作文(2)

凌应强 凌哥英语 2019-06-11

凌哥昨天发布了文章《2019年浙江高考英语写作(1),可以这么写》,引来了很多微友的围观。其中有一位微友“未然”留言道:



凌哥急您所急、想您所想,来了!


“概要写作”的题型,是浙江省高考改革后英语学科在2016年新推出的题型之一。每次从“概要写作”和“短文续写”中二选一进行命题。


2019年6月的试题是“概要写作”:

概要写作(满分25分)

    阅读下面的短文,根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。

    Parents everywhere praise their kids. Jenn Berman, author of The A to Z Guide to Raising Happy and Confident Kids, says, "We've gone to the opposite extreme of a few decades ago when parents tended to be more strict." By giving kids a lot of praise, parents think they're building their children's confidence, when, in fact, it may be just the opposite. Too much praise can backfire and, when given in a way that's insincere, make kids afraid to try new things or take a risk for fear of not being able to stay on top where their parents' praise has put them.

    Still, don't go too far in the other direction. Not giving enough praise can be just as damaging as giving too much. Kids will feel like they're not good enough or that you don't care and, as a result, may see no point in trying hard for their accomplishments.

    So what is the right amount of praise? Experts say that the quality of praise is more important than the quantity. If praise is sincere and focused on the effort not the outcome, you can give it as often as your child does something that deserves a verbal reward. "We should especially recognize our children's efforts to put themselves and work hard to achieve a goal," says Donahue, author of Parenting Without Fear: Letting Go of Worry and Focusing on What Really Matters. "One thing to remember is that it's the process not the end product that matters."

    Your son may not be the best basketball player on his team. But if he's out there every day and playing hard, you should praise his effort regardless of whether his team wins or loses. Praising the effort and not the outcome can also mean recognizing your child when she has worked hard to clean the yard, cook dinner, or finish a book report. But whatever it is, praise should be given on a case-by-case basis and be proportionate(相称的) to the amount of effort your child has put into it. 


对于“概要写作”来说,基本上就是:


精炼 = 惊艳


没办法呀!因为考生只能将文本的大意表达出来,而不能自己添油加醋。如果变成自由作文,就是添忧加错了。


而且,请对照一下凌哥昨天发布的文章《2019年浙江高考英语写作(1),可以这么写》,我们可以发现,“写作(1)应用文写作”的词数要求是“80词左右”,分值是15分,而“写作(2)概要写作”的词数要求是“60词左右”,分值却是25分。“概要写作”真的好值钱啊!


话不多说,大家快都往两边挤挤,凌哥要应考了!


[1] 常规版

There are two extremes of praising: being too strict with the kids and giving a lot of praise.

The former makes kids feel they are not good enough while insincere praise makes them afraid to try new things or take risks.

The point is not the quantity of praise but the quality. We should praise more on kid’s efforts and process instead of the result.

(67词)


常规版,就是“短文缩写”。各位童鞋,“缩写”会不会?是缩写啊!

所以呢,如果您感觉写概要比较吃力的话,就想着是缩写吧。

今年的原文内容是一篇论说文,其中包含了论点、论述、引用、实例等4个方面的内容。


缩写议论文的一般步骤是:

1. 通读全文。

2. 忽视实例。

3. 整理论点。

整理论点,是关键的一步。其实还是议论文的阅读技巧啦,重点关注一些提示词、主题句等,理解其中的论点结构,比如总分式、并列式、对比式、综合式。论点梳理清楚了,这一题也就成功了一大半了。

4. 撰写草稿。

5. 修改文字。

修改文字的目的是保证语句的正确性、连贯性,确保词数

6. 誊写正稿。


您看,要这么多步骤,这25分很值啦!是不是?


对了,您一定好奇凌哥说的“创意”是什么?客官稍等,马上就到!


[2] 创意版

Quantity or quality? 

Talking of praise, most people nowadays pay more attention to the quantity of praise, believing that a lot of praise will build their children's confidence while actually too much insincere praise destroys their confidence and courage.

Experts say the quality of praise lies in the proportionate focus on the children's efforts during the whole process, which should be on a case-by-case basis. 

(65词)

尽管是“概要”,但是也可以不“正经”一下,对不对?所以,在开头段落来个简单的问句,让读者一下子摸不着头脑,吸引他们读下去。而这个选择疑问句,也开门见山地提出了文章的关键词。


第二段是一个超长句,讨论quantity。过去和现在的对比,通过nowadays和pay more attention来隐含了。 用while的并列对比,呈现了原文的主要论点。


第三段也可以算是一个超长句。对原文信息进行了高度提炼,并使用了和原文完全不一样的语句结构进行了转述。


相比于“缩写式概要”,这种“重构式概要”对考生的语言表达能力(词汇运用能力和语句组织能力)的要求更高。如果考生表现优秀,就能获得高分。


好啦,凌哥考试结束了。您给凌哥的“重构式概要”打几分呀?


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